This piece is interesting to me. I enjoy the format a lot, using tarot cards as ways to break up sections and provide extra (vague) context is neat. This story probably didn't need to be a part 1, obviously I don't know how much you have planned but this could've had more meat on its bones. I think you dialogue is very realistic, but there were a few times where things just hinged on uncanny - you could go through this again with a fine-toothed comb to catch this weird bits. The strawberry jam description was awesome, and your prose in general was pretty flowy which I enjoyed. You should work on your capitalization, you didn't capitalize a lot of your dialogue, which I have gone ahead and fixed
A quick staff note: I like the image you used, but our site requires that any outside media used is under the cc-by-sa 3.0 copyright license. Can you provide a link for where you got this image and if it is applicable to our license?