I. The Observer / Discussion

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Nylo 16 Aug 2023 19:19

This is my first non-SSS-Project entry into the Library, and thus a special occasion for me ^w^

This short story is meant to be the first in a row, so not all questions on the setting and characters one might have are answered right away. I'll probably collect all related stories on a dedicated hub once the time comes.

I'm mixing ideas together I've been having for a while, some even go back to my early teen years. I am aiming at telling a greater narrative with a - comparatively - minimalistic approach, so no walls of text and overly long pieces.

Thanks to MaddGasserGaton and AKA-M80 for critting!

Licencing:

Theme: "Once Upon a Time", created by IronShears

Sketches: All three sketches included in this piece have been created by myself and are hereby released under CC BY-SA 3.0.

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FleshMaddAvalon 16 Aug 2023 19:31

Very happy to snag the first upvote on this, bro. A wonderful piece, created with the canon of the library in mind. It's quirky, well-written, with beautiful art to go along with it. We are truly blessed to have you as a member of our little community. <3

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I watch the yonder hills
See foodwrenches toil in dust
Let their cacophonous calls
Rend our bodies to rust

Nylo 16 Aug 2023 19:37

Staph, you make me blush!

Snapdragon133 14 Sep 2023 20:36

There was a small line between genius and insanity. Cornell had definitely snorted that line.

Now that is an opening line! Love that, plus there's a bunch more gems in here that I really enjoyed. I also quite like the character of Før. My main criticism is that I think I would've liked to see the recovery of the book, it sounds like an exciting and character defining scene - I could've really seen how crazy Cornell was there. But what's here is very interesting and I'm excited to see where it goes!

Edit: I forgot to mention the art????? Really fantastic stuff, super evocative

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