Jeremy´s Paradox of Perspective / Discussion

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ALBANY MENTIONED

FleshMaddAvalon 25 Aug 2023 12:51

ALBANY MENTIONED WHOOOHOOOOO

But seriously, what an amazing piece of horror fiction. I genuinely wish I had come up with it myself. It's an excellent, tightly woven piece of literature, with a desperately original feeling to it I haven't seen anywhere else. Bravo.

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I watch the yonder hills
See foodwrenches toil in dust
Let their cacophonous calls
Rend our bodies to rust

NotAnOligarch 25 Aug 2023 13:10

Common psychopath L
Anyway, critting this was a joy. Glad to see this up!
Well done, +1!

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Fires rage just below the surface of the ice.

Stygian Blue 25 Aug 2023 18:56

Hey, I liked this! Neat formatting, sweet little story. Could have been boring as hell, but the quick trot of the pacing made it just simply delightful. Very refreshing. Celery sticks stirring raspberry lemonade, with lemon juice ice cubes inside, condensation glittering like diamonds on a hot summer day, beach spray in the face and sunglasses dazzling over the eyes. Reclining against a tree, in the shade yet not through dappling. Just delightful. Well done!

-Styg

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What is life if not the contrast between what has been and what will become?

Snapdragon133 18 Sep 2023 16:48

This is pretty cool, the format is super innovative and it breathes life into this story. I wish the themes were a little tighter, such as the probability stuff at the beginning. I feel like you could've carried that a little farther. I also wonder why Jeremy was chosen for the title, he isn't super present in the plot. He is responsible for many of the events that carried out, but it doesn't feel like his perspective plays a lot to play in the story. Perhaps that's the point, that Jeremey's perspective is paradoxical because despite his important effect on the rest of the character's lives, he isn't affected by theirs at all. If that's the case, I really enjoy that. Either way, this was an enjoyable piece, so good job +1