"château uttered final"
add some kind of interstitial word, "chateau uttered its few final"
"The bricks to the right glided by in the light." I really like the rhyme
Your grasp of the language has really increased, I think!
"the floor, and again the pipes." should be "the pipes again."
"that Šefčovič was" I have literally no idea hwo to pronounce this.
"The Observer strokes his clean-shaven, haggard cheeks. "Fetch them." he decided then. But before the raven could dutifully rush off, he held him by the sleeve, looking up at him with darting eyes from under his frown. "And hand out the weapons.""
Too much use of pronouns in a single sentance. Try using their names more.
"He held his energetic musket" did you perhaps mean energy musket?
""No, I want some ans…"" ellipses should be a hyphen
As before, you deftly capture characters by giving each of them singular actions to conduct that makes them feel rich and varied, despite the relatively short (compared to a novel) word count. For, the incomprehensible name I am too American to pronounce, and the Observer make an excellent trio. It is paced wonderfully, and the prose is used to great extent to set a wonderful and interesting world. I can barely tell english is your second language- you write as though it was your native. Bravo, Nylo, bravo. I love it, once again.
