Well this is finally posted. Special thanks to Styg who did a fantastic belated in-depth crit, and Rosie on discord who helped cement a broader sense of cultural history to the early portion of the story.
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It v good taste like chicken left in the dust bowl to mummify
What is life if not the contrast between what has been and what will become?
Evoked a series of emotions that im not sure I'm able to describe right now. But well done nevertheless
The dust bowl of my dreams weighs heavy on my mind
Stripping me of faith while a devil laughs unkind
A perfect piece
To read in piece
As the world gently weeps
I watch the yonder hills
See foodwrenches toil in dust
Let their cacophonous calls
Rend our bodies to rust
I appreciate how normal this is. The Taker is present, yes, but it really does act like a Watcher for the story, so the focus is almost entirely on the stories of the people. And these are great vignettes, all of them have pretty strong premises that I enjoyed a lot. My favorite is probably the one with the woman "dating" the prospector. It's so awfully tragic I can't help but love it. Despite my love for you allowing the stories to breathe, I do wish the Taker was slightly more present in the collection of the dreams it has at the end of the story, I think it really would've solidified that throughline in the story. Overall tho, I'm always super intrigued by a reaper type of character, and I think this is another great one with a great story to go with it! Very nice, +1
it's so appropriate that you originalky recommended this to me in the context of my love for the western, because even though this isn't in the classic western time period, it features so many of the themes that are hallmarks of the best westerns in the correct setting that i can't help but be obsessed. I was glued to the piece throughout and it left me wanting more. +1
I really like this piece. It's really fun, in a rather sad way, if that makes sense. This strong emotion of lack of belonging, of a certain world that once was but isn't anymore, and how people keep on moving, and once they don't, the Taker comes, and until then, the Watcher remains. It's a beautiful piece that really evokes a feeling of melancholy, and its anthological nature really plays into this.
All in all, this was a beautiful westernized piece that I enjoyed a lot. Easy +1
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