An Ode to the Bike Wheel locked to the CVS on the Corner of University City and Prices Fork / Discussion

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You spin me right 'round baby right 'round

Snapdragon133 02 Oct 2023 16:44

Been a while! Some fun facts about this piece: this is describing a real actual bike wheel that has been locked to a bike rack for at least four years which has brought me delight the more I've seen it sitting there over the years. The original version of this piece actually included a picture of the wheel, but an irl classmate pointed out that by taking a picture I had found a different way to steal the wheel, so that had to be removed for thematic reasons. However, if it will absolutely kill you to not see the wheel, message me and I'll send a picture :) that'll be your pilgrimage.

Big thanks to Stygian Blue and my poetry classmates for taking a look at this one and giving me some valuable critique!

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Re: You spin me right 'round baby right 'round

Stygian Blue 03 Oct 2023 00:58

I am poetry classmates

Massive delicious. Massive enjoy. Bicycle. I loved the part where I yelled for two paragraphs about front wheel gear not have. Also the CVS drive thru that takes 30 minutes and change anyway. October! Glad you are back.

-Styg

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What is life if not the contrast between what has been and what will become?

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destinysday 02 Oct 2023 16:57

Disappointed by the lack of wheel representation, tbh.

But fr, it's always the small and simple things like this that make going to work so much more tolerable. You captured a very light and whimsical mood in this piece that I think a lot of us can relate to. Well done

NotAnOligarch 02 Oct 2023 18:23

But are there more doors than wheels, or more wheels than doors? Are we counting metaphorical wheels? What's the deal? Now what's this all for…

Okay I'm sorry.
Good poetry, class is paying off apparently!
+1

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Fires rage just below the surface of the ice.

Rounderhouse 03 Oct 2023 00:13

Thoughtful but not melancholy. Nice little piece, makes you think about the lives the forgotten objects around us live, alienated from their purpose.

zipzipskins 18 Mar 2024 16:23

i can't believe i haven't commented on this one. i'd better get it done before it Wins All the Awards!

there is so much to love here. first, the way the work is formatted suggests a beautiful pacing and rhythm. there are very intentional spacing and break choices which are obviously chosen with so much care and thought. i love all the little conceits and touches (4-3-2-1, cure-thru, scion of the consumer value store just to name a few [i didn't even know that's what cvs stood for. i thought it stood only for itself. the poem is educational])

and then there is the broad context and all the little moments you suggest, insinuate, that lead up to your encounters with this very real object, that bring both of you here to the present day.

the language is beautiful, intentional, perfectly selected. and that title.

+1 from months ago. love this.

+1

NightGoddessNyx 19 Jun 2024 19:00

Sometimes, I'll stare at a random object, like a pebble, and think to myself: "Has anyone else ever looked at this specific thing past a quick glance? Am I the only one in the world who has cared to give it a spare thought?"

This reminds me of that feeling.

UncannyClown 06 Aug 2024 01:20

i really enjoy the reverential tone and little flourishes of detail throughout. sometimes, you just need a small thing.