Low Midnight Tide, Green Spring Stars / Discussion

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Stygian Blue 02 Nov 2023 00:40

I have festered too long; my mind is musty, and it is time to clean the attic. One eye is green, yes, but the other is blue.

Many thanks to carolynn, Snapdragon, Rosie, and Destinysday for the critique. This work would be nowhere near as splendid as it is now without you. I love you all.

Now, housekeeping: I am okay. This work is insomniac thoughts put to paper from weekly midnight arrivals home. I will not die on any of you, and I have people and support systems. All is well with me, and I hope all is well with all of you.

Sweet dreams. Stay alive.

-Styg

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What is life if not the contrast between what has been and what will become?

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destinysday 02 Nov 2023 00:45

Remember giving you your crit for this around 1:18 in the morning, lmao. Glad to see you finally got around to posting it. Another wonderful piece as always, well done!

Snapdragon133 02 Nov 2023 00:59

A somewhat rare pointed piece from you, that I enjoyed reading immensely. You bring such a conflict to the sea that I've never seen before, and the way you tied in its surroundings as almost being a part of the ever-changing sea was really good too. Great job Styg +1

Stygian Blue 07 Nov 2023 00:09

Note to self: Make next work an absolute brain spiral of flowery prose that grabs ankles and drags readers into the abyss.
Thank so much! Am glad that the scenery worked out as well as it did. Glad you liked it! I'll refrain from putting snails on your leaves.

-Styg

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What is life if not the contrast between what has been and what will become?

Rounderhouse 02 Nov 2023 01:01

This is really, really good. I'm a little sparse for words but that's because it stirs some powerful emotions in me. I've been in an existential funk like this before — I think the visual metaphor you're playing with, of boats going around in circles in the night-morning-fog, of drowning and drowning until you violently pull yourself back out of the drink, are deeply evocative and effective. Seeing our narrator's progression from dull resignation at one's fate, defaulting to extreme action, then to accepting, scared but triumphant, that you can and will overpower your circumstances through better means — it's really, really good, and deeply identifiable. Well done, Styggy.

Stygian Blue 07 Nov 2023 00:12

Not gonna lie, at first the ending was very different — I am grateful endlessly to Snack for encouraging me to amplify the transition there into something greater. It ties the work together quite powerfully. Thank you for your kind words — I'm glad to have been able to write these topics with the weight they deserve. Quite proud to have written enough that it is both vague and specific, the issues it discusses. Your comments always make me want to write more, and I hold them near and dear to my heart. To sea, Round One, and at low tide we shall find dungeness crabs in rock pools.

-Styg

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What is life if not the contrast between what has been and what will become?

Spoddetman 02 Nov 2023 01:38

Fantastic piece. It resonated with me deeply while never losing that distinctly Stygian air that I would be missing were it not there. You bring dreams to life and weave them into stories powerful enough to warp minds and get me to think about myself. I haven't seen many things that nail the feeling of just wanting to sink down into your own self-destructive behavior better than this does. All the best, and here's to happy days ahead.

Iridescent, oil-on-water +1.

Stygian Blue 07 Nov 2023 00:16

I love investigating self-destruction — it's something which to the logical side seems so counterintuitive to life, if one is thinking entirely without emotion or history, but once one considers emotion and history in a life then living looks a whole lot like a balancing act between fifty million different factors and it's quite the shock and warm pride that so many aren't living life at their worst. Perhaps there is a better side, and life is mirrored many times over and we each live in our own scattered reflection. I'm not making sense except to myself, I believe, but that's all right. Thrilled to have made this, and so glad you enjoyed. Thank you so much!
Next up to explore is addictive behaviours, I think.
-Styg

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NotAnOligarch 02 Nov 2023 12:53

You write what and how I wish I could write. If only I could vacuum out your soul and keep it in a jar to be my muse. This is fantastic and all-too relatable. Incredibly well done, a hearty +1

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Fires rage just below the surface of the ice.

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FleshMaddAvalon 02 Nov 2023 16:30

I'm going to yell your name at every family member that asks me who I'm inspired by.

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I watch the yonder hills
See foodwrenches toil in dust
Let their cacophonous calls
Rend our bodies to rust