http://wanderers-sandbox.wikidot.com/vishardsh-s-sandbox Last tab, In Their Wake
So this is a collaborative work between me and AKAM80. He wrote the first part up until the letter, I wrote everything after that.
This is a sequel piece to Reverence/Revulsion. It somewhat stands on its own, but reading that first is definitely the recommended experience (at least for me).
Specific questions:
-Where should the hyperlink to Reverence/Revulsion be? At the first flashback to the previous piece? At the first mention of the word "Operator"? At the first mention of Trip's name? Or should the series box at the top be kept? Or modified in any way?
-How does the shift from second person in Reverence/Revulsion to third person in this feel?
-How does the ending hit? Does it feel incongruous with the rest of the piece, given that I went rather weird with it?
-I used the cult as a plot point without dealing with them directly. Does this read like an oversight?
-Is the change in prose style where the author changed noticeable or distracting?
And of course any other pointers. Thanks!