Howdy! Despite my questionable qualifications in the realm of poetry, I thought I'd give this a shot and see what's what.
that faintly torn into PVC stall.
I'm like 99% certain PVC isn't used to make stalls. But I also don't think many other people would care about this detail so do as you please.
I think the title's fine, but titles have never been my strong suit.
The formatting is a bit wonky, I'll admit, but it isn't wonky enough to disrupt the reading process in an overly egregious manner. The part I question the most is where you just toss it off to the right completely. Now, me personally, I don't see the purpose in the formatting as a whole, but I rarely got the purpose of weird formatting in almost every poem I've read.
Yeah, it makes sense to me, but it feels a tad short. I think I'd like another example, but as is it still makes complete sense.
Honestly, that's about all I've got. I liked it, bathroom stall graffiti is an interesting little thing in life and I think you've done well to represent it.
However, this comes from a very unqualified source. I don't really get poetry, nor the finer details of its making, so take all of this with a fist-sized grain of salt.
