First WL Post.

Summary:

“Yes I think we are still on Earth” Said Mr. Nelson looking around quizzically. “The other sure thing is that we are on a ship called the Moa, she is captained by Sir Charles Phipher of the Royal Para-Scientific Museum.” Elaborated Nelson in the most mocking of faux posh accents. “Although for our purposes we may call them The Jailors” he added with a wink.

First WL Post.

Dr Rocks 18 Mar 2016 16:04

http://wanderers-sandbox.wikidot.com/something-about-the-sea

Any advice is appreciated!

Last edited on 21 Mar 2016 04:15 by Dr Rocks Show more

Re: First WL Post.

Bryx 20 Mar 2016 17:29

This needs some serious proofreading. There's weird capitalization and paragraph breaks all over the place, and a few missing words, even. It makes it difficult to really examine the story itself.