Need crit: Ezazel, goddess of impossible: Black moon, part 1 of 2

This is only part 1, part 2 will be out soon, but in the meantime, just give me your opinion on part 1.

Content summary: Ezazel is a goddess that embody the impossible, but she dislikes this role. When she once left the place she was tasked to protect (the impossible world), a terrible event occurred that impacted the possible worlds as well. Through this experience, she learned a valuable lesson about her role.

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