UPDATE: Roxie is Still Alive / Discussion

This is the discussion related to the wiki page UPDATE: Roxie is Still Alive.

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Spoddetman 15 Aug 2024 18:43

Hi! This is my first foray into a prospective new series, featuring a character that's close enough to me to call a proper author avatar. The excellent diegetic blog theme was graciously commissioned from IronShears, without whom this would not have been possible. This is Roxie's introduction, but make no mistake, you'll be seeing more of her.

Additional advice given by meltedbee, which is greatly appreciated.

FleshMaddAvalon 16 Aug 2024 20:12

Absolutely adore the idea of a blogger entering the WL sphere and recording their experiences, not to mention how well you establish her tone and indicated personality traits within the writing. Good job, I'm looking forward to more from Roxie!

-Avalon

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I watch the yonder hills
See foodwrenches toil in dust
Let their cacophonous calls
Rend our bodies to rust

Maxyfran73 25 Aug 2024 20:47

Hmmm, I'm conflicted. On one hand, this looks really nice, and it's a solid intro, but on the other, I don't think what's here is enough to really make me think this is a full picture. Feels underwhelming because past introducing the existence of a character, it doesn't do anything particularly interesting or engaging with it. I wholeheartedly believe that you'll make them a much more interesting entity on following entries, but what's here just isn't enough imo. Novote.