I'm somewhat torn on this.
I think that you need to make this piece a bit longer. It would benefit from a more slow-burn type of buildup, because while you have semblances of this at the start, the latter half of the story really speeds through what you're trying to get through, which may be the intention, but I don't think it works that well here, or you haven't translated it well enough.
I think that this would also benefit from the wall of text being broken up into smaller pieces in order for better readability, and to make it seem less jumbled throughout the story. The story is also a little convoluted here, so I think some more buildup to why you would be in the forest, and so on is a little needed here.
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