On the Rails South of Rechemstei / Discussion

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Vishardsh 20 Apr 2025 08:39

Thank you to A Machine for Sloths for telling me that I had apparently only decided to do tetrameter for the last half of the poem and the first half was all over the place. Poetry may not be my strong suit but I am nothing if not able to count to eight

Spoddetman 20 Apr 2025 12:45

I really, really like this poem, particularly the ending. It's abrupt, but in a way that's completely fitting. I love the description of the structure and the seer who points the way. Every word of this packs a punch. Well done.

Meandering +1.

rumetzen 20 Apr 2025 19:30

I really like the flow of this and the sense of wide ambiguity it creates.

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UncannyClown 20 Apr 2025 21:56

what rume said. i enjoy the way that this hints at a large world beyond the knowable.

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zipzipskins 22 Apr 2025 16:30

i want more vish poetry — you say poetry isn't your strong suit but the way your lines turn outward from one another and the extremely natural flow despite fitting it into the constraints of meter are really excellent, and i think this is a very fine entry in the canon. it's extremely "vibes" if you will. +1