How Tetesh Made the World / Discussion

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Plilt 29 Apr 2025 18:46

I wrote this and another myth for Tracks Across the Sand but didn't get them up during the event. The first is up now, though, and the second one will be up as soon as a watercolor for it is done as well. My thanks to tawny0, who provided extensive feedback and editing advice, and Anorrack, who pointed out that my initial attempt at painting a tail stump did not convey the proper injury at all.

I painted the image myself using watercolors. Yes, Tetesh doesn't have a silver pelt in it; in this culture's mythology the yaka don't initially.

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UncannyClown 30 Apr 2025 19:44

i like this a lot. it feels very authentic as a creation myth — there's a lot of real-life myths where a higher being sacrifices parts of themself to create prominent features of the earth, and this slots in nicely. it's also very visceral, which i enjoy. my one criticism is that constantly alternating pronouns is a cumbersome and somewhat irritating way to convey that tetesh is a based any/all (or whatever is going on with their gender). if one pronoun was used consistently within individual sentences, i think parts of this would parse quite a bit better.

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Plilt 09 May 2025 20:57

After some consideration, I've edited this. I did include a bit in the start that should hopefully ensure the appropriate fluidity and ambiguity remains, but it should read better now.