this girl i knew / Discussion

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roxie has issues lmao

Spoddetman 17 May 2025 02:28

I wrote this for three reasons. One, I wanted to try my hand at writing romance. Two, I like Roxie, and it was time to continue her story. Three, I took the advice of a friend and tried to put a little of myself in my characters. Roxie is a reflection of myself in many ways, and through writing about her, I've gotten more attached to her. At times, this piece was legitimately hard to write. I hope you all enjoy this tragic fucked-up t4t lesbian romance as much as I did. Thanks to my IRL friends in my creative writing class, as well as Rosie on here, for crit.

skylar_the_rat 17 May 2025 02:44

holy fuck. uh, ok so here's some things i took away from it:
- you have an amazing ability to couple sentences together. thoughts play off of one another with such ease, sentences are framed like they're lines in a poem. this hooked me instantly.
- your imagery is amazing. actually gushing off the page. in talking about the nature at the beginning, you let your talent for description be fully unleashed, and then immediately reel us back in with, "The people there were nice," reminding us that this is a post on a chat board.
- the whole thing is incredibly well written, in the sense that it feels so so real. both the story and the way that the storyteller writes out all the scenes feels so candid. i teared up reading through it and got a sad chuckle from the ending message.
thank you for sharing.

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UncannyClown 18 May 2025 00:38

yeah i dig the blog post style of this; roxie's candid storytelling lends punch to the events of the narrative, and it does so without being obnoxious in the way actual bloggers sometimes are. the ending is also darkly funny to me.

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FleshMaddAvalon 18 May 2025 17:28

Dope. I love seeing such a wonderful lil piece hit the feed. While I do find the pacing to be a bit all over I think it accurately mimics what someone's real life thought process would be around a journal and I think it's executed wonderfully here. Your imagery and emotional displays are delightful as well. Good shit.

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