Crit Request - Snail Phobosophy

Crit Request - Snail Phobosophy

A Machine for Sloths 21 May 2025 00:57

http://wanderers-sandbox-2.wikidot.com/a-machine-for-sloths

part two of snailverse. I am particularly interested into as if this work is appropriate to post alone, or if I would be prudent to wait and post it with part 3, but all feedback is welcome.

Re: Crit Request - Snail Phobosophy

UncannyClown 21 May 2025 21:11

i thoroughly enjoyed reading this. cyril and vivian are great fun to observe, and the narrative voice feels authentically like one of those victorian-era serial writers who was paid by the word. that said, i do think it may be prudent to post it and the next part at the same time. it may even be better to merge the two pieces together into one large snail opus, for the ending is a little too teasing for my taste. at the very least, i think some link back to the first part will be necessary to prevent people from stumbling across this part on accident and not understanding what they're reading at all.