A lot better than some of the other ones I've read. While some things about the language I've said still hold true, I think that this word choice for the poem flows nicely, and it really makes the kind of sarcastic type of tone come off rather nicely. The message is to the point, not overly conveluded which I like as well, and I think the length is just right for it. I don't really have any criciticms for this, as I think you did a vry well job. Thanks you.
"—I said, with a posed look."