Crit Request: Final Tributes

Crit Request: Final Tributes

Alisan1234 25 Nov 2025 01:30

http://wanderers-sandbox-2.wikidot.com/final-tribute

The story is mostly finished, just need to write one more letter and (maybe) flesh out the 3rd one, as well as clean the draft up and check for any grammar mistakes

I'd like to hear some critique on if the article does a good job in evoking any sense of relief or catharsis, or even any other emotion. Furthermore, I'd like to know if the introductive part of the story, which is the child's journey with the Ferryman, drags out or not. Lastly, does the story get across the main point, which is the fact that forgiveness is key to a death without regrets?

Re: Crit Request: Final Tributes

rumetzen 28 Nov 2025 23:05

I think this is a decent start. The intro is good, with solid writing and establishing the pacing/what's going well. The letters feel a little dull to me- kind of a very generic "perspective of a child, perspective of a soldier" type deal, without much flavor to them beyond, not much specifics of character or situation that really help me look like I'm looking at the life of a real person. That's the part I would focus on more.

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