Crit Request: The Coming of Ayakc
Hello! I wrote this piece for my creative writing course, and I wanted to put it on the site as well. I don't often find myself making crit requests, but since this one is Foundation-related, I wanted to get some feedback on whether or not I should post it here. It is not formatted like an SCP article or anything like that, but it blends elements of the Foundation alongside prose. Feedback?
It's the third tab at this link: [http://wanderers-sandbox.wikidot.com/disturbedaeons-2]