Crit Request: man as rock - The Wanderers' Library

I don't mind the all lowercase, but "im" and "ill" should have apostrophes in them.

just for a moment.

Shouldn't have a period at the end; none of your other sentences do. You might even consider removing the question mark from the first line.

Other than that, I don't have much useful advice. The imagery works okay, at least to me. Someone who does more poetry can probably give you better critique regarding it than I can.

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