Heyo! First time requesting crit, please go hard on me, I want this piece to be the best that it can be! It's already been looked at by some people I know, but I would still appreciate a few more eyes on it. Please heed the content warning on the piece. I'm not versed in writing sci-fi, and as such, not too sure about what's going on here, along with the medical stuff. More or less a case of "I'm 80% sure I know how this works!" and rolling with it. If you are educated on these topics, feel free to tear it apart! Although if it's the "actually there should be gravity" thing again I'm sorry man I'd have to rewrite the whole piece for that to work. I've accepted I'm wrong about it.
Piece Link: http://wanderers-sandbox-2.wikidot.com/scrimple-218-s-sandbox
Also, yes, I am aware of the em dashes, yes, I've been called AI before, no, I am not. However, if they are used incorrectly, do feel free to tell me! That is something I fumble often, my love for em dashes occasionally overrides my grammatical sense.