An Azzlething

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An Azzlething

marslifeform 03 Feb 2013 22:52

Just wonderin' if I could get some people to look at this draft on the first tab

_{(Is that how things work around here?)}

_{(If not, I'm sorry)}

Re: An Azzlething

Jack Manganese 04 Feb 2013 00:57

I'm pretty sure it's ok to get feedback here. This thread doesn't get a lot of use, but that's probably because we don't have a lot of writers.

I though this was well written and interesting. I only have one suggestion:

+ typo?

I politely denied.

Maybe should be "politely declined".

Re: An Azzlething

marslifeform 04 Feb 2013 02:41

You're right, that works better. Thanks!

Re: An Azzlething

Dr Balthazaar 04 Feb 2013 12:40

Like Jack said, it's fine to get feedback here, however you'll get more feedback faster from chat.
All in all, that was really interesting. I'd upvote.