Opinion on draft

Opinion on draft

MysteriousMan 04 Feb 2013 17:22

I posted this draft on the sandbox the other day and I want to know what people think of it
here's the link http://wanderers-sandbox.wikidot.com/myseriousman

Re: Opinion on draft

Jack Manganese 04 Feb 2013 19:35

It's very short and filled with run-on sentences. You should flesh it out a bit. Maybe give us some background on this character, or some other reason to care about him.

Re: Opinion on draft

Vivax 04 Feb 2013 19:46

I agree with Jack. There isn't enough here for me to actually help you with.