Make like a tree.

Summary:

IMPROVED!!! NEW FORMULA!!!

It's a small world.

Dr Cuddles 17 Mar 2013 23:45

Hello! With my new library card in hand, I would like to ask for comments on this New Document I just produced. (I haven't been in chat yet. Maybe some day when I feel chatty.)

Re: It's a small world.

(account deleted) 17 Mar 2013 23:58

It's not bad, but there's not nearly enough there. In addition, the photographs themselves are very blah and the captions fail to provide any real hook.

Re: It's a small world.

Bunton 18 Mar 2013 07:46

Agreeing. Frankly, the images feel almost extraneous. They don't provide enough padding, and when you take them away, you have about 100 words of content. I would advise reducing the images to small, right-aligned items present in only a portion of entries, rather than making them the main focus.

I would be happy to re-evaluate this when you increase the content.

Re: It's a small world.

Dr Cuddles 18 Mar 2013 12:04

Thanks to the both of you for reading it. I will increase the content as you suggest.

I liked the idea of just a few photographs with cryptic comments written on the back, but that may not work so well. I will turn it into a more detailed journal.

Re: It's a small world.

Dr Cuddles 28 Apr 2013 00:58

Here is a New!, Improved! draft. It's now much more leafy, and the pictures are smaller and collapsible.

The words “suffusion of yellow” and the reference to a cat flap are, of course, a tribute to Douglas Adams. In a sense, it's a story about the interconnectedness of all trees…

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Re: Make like a tree.

DrOrion 28 Apr 2013 01:52

I like it.

I don't think the second paragraph fits with the rest, though.

Re: Make like a tree.

Dr Cuddles 28 Apr 2013 13:18

Thank you. I’m not sure if you mean 2d paragraph of the first part, or the paragraph of 2nd picture?

+ Here is an explanation of the whole.

In the first part, Brother Dwayne praises the narrator on his tree and implies that the wonders are accessible to anyone. You just have to figure out how to access them. Brother Dwayne already had an unusual perception of the universe, but the maple syrup increased that perception, like the spice in Dune or the soy sauce in JDATE. (I got the idea for the syrup when I noticed the shape of Japanese maple leaves).

By doing this “communion” with the miniature tree, he became more attuned to them. The cat flap is a miniature door within the bigger door and it swings either way. That symbolizes that Dwayne gained an easier access to the hidden sides of the universe.

Just as he was changed by the maple, he infused some of his skill in the 3rd one. That’s the origin of my SCP-1816.

The main idea is that all these miniature landscapes are part of a larger landscape. We only see them as separate and miniature from our perspective in the universe. Essentially they are gateways to alien worlds.

Brother Dwayne eventually decided to go exploring. He may have gotten stranded somewhere as suggested by the last part. The narrator suspects all that but never had the imagination to believe it and never followed in Brother Dwayne’s steps.

Re: Make like a tree.

DrOrion 28 Apr 2013 13:29

I meant the second paragraph of the first part.

I got what it was for, I just think it should be shorter, because Father Dwayne is already characterized quite a bit it later parts.

Re: Make like a tree.

Dr Cuddles 28 Apr 2013 21:08

I see. I will try trimming a bit and make it fit better.