Okay man, I feel really bad about this, but I gotta give it a -1. FOR NOW. My biggest issue with this article is the terrible formatting, if this could be fixed, I would /immediately/ change my vote to a +1. It's largely well written with a good campy sort of vibe, and I really enjoyed it. So once you fix those formatting errors, I will happily change my vote. (Also what book does this belong to? For tagging)
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I spent a while struggling with this one mainly because I knew something was wrong with it, but I couldn't figure out what it was. Thanks for clarifying. Also any suggestions with what to do with it?
You know, other than make it not a splurge of text?
Add line breaks after each paragraph. It will help a lot.
"But, he's so old!" Fynphar Swiftblade, Top Spy to The King of Laryyd and Rakish Dandy, protested.
"That doesn't mean he should give up! Determination doesn't stop with age, you know."
"I WISH TO HEAR MORE OF THE WALKING WINDMILLS!" Declared Kuul'yar…
"But, he's so old!" Fynphar Swiftblade, Top Spy to The King of Laryyd and Rakish Dandy, protested.
"That doesn't mean he should give up! Determination doesn't stop with age, you know."
"I WISH TO HEAR MORE OF THE WALKING WINDMILLS!" Declared Kuul'yar…
Alright, I've broken up the paragraphs a bit. Does it read any easier or should I still tweak it a bit more?
It's definitely better, but there is still some dialogue that needs to be broken up more.
You might want to remove the colon from the URL. Because of wikidot's parsing, that really messes with how pages are catalogued — a colon indicates a category, so it doesn't register as a normal entry.
I don't really like some of the dialogue in this.
This was silly, but I enjoyed it.
I did have to fix a massive amount of errors. And then, I discovered that it would've been even more errors if Camber Squid hadn't already done a ton of edits, so thank you to her as well. :P
And it still needs more work. Author, consider giving this another once-over.
Jeez, this entry has had a rocky past, judging by the comments, edit history, and its current rating. I do think there's been some clear improvements since it first went up. Though there are still a few places where the phrasing is awkward and the dialogue leaves something to be desired, I ultimately enjoyed this! It's a neat adventure through the halls of the Library and Archives.
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