20XX - My first story. Advice needed!!

Summary:

I've started writing my first story and I would like to know what you think I should edit/add/remove. Thanks for any help!

20XX - My first story. Advice needed!!

DrGuise 30 Nov 2018 05:42

My sandbox with the story can be found here: http://wanderers-sandbox.wikidot.com/dr-guise

Thanks so much!!

Re: 20XX - My first story. Advice needed!!

Electronic_Bunny 30 Nov 2018 15:28

This was actually pretty creepy. I was a little put off by the format of the date entries, but I grew into it after a few lines. There are a few spellings here and there but overall I thought it was good. I liked the depth you decided to go with the life-linked library cards, it was some nice world building. You were able to really twist the horror of the library into a dangerous environment. Good job, and keep up the writing.

Re: 20XX - My first story. Advice needed!!

Einer von Rabe 21 Jan 2019 09:09

I like it too, please finish it.

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