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I enjoyed critting this. I feel like there are three distinct eras within the work — the Trek, the Friendship, and the End.
I love the spider It just keeps following. I appreciate how it is never truly resolved, exactly.
The descriptions are fantastic. Some of your best prose, I think, especially in the moments where the jungle is overpoweringly loud and the sun is blisteringly bright. Your work shines.
I love the musical interludes. I love the quiet moments of gender and adoration. I love the process of getting older and how it's a coming out story, but isn't, and how it's a coming of age story, but isn't.
I love the differences in how people talk, the cultures between, the everything.
This work is a journey sung over a fire, quiet and somber at times and delighted and sprightly at others, low and sweet in-between. It's something I hope to remember to tell to children who ask for stories, at times, and hope to walk amidst within my dreams, at others. It's hyacinth and briar mashed into a poultice and made into a cake, and I would like a slice. Well done.
-Styg
What is life if not the contrast between what has been and what will become?